The Angel Express
by Eric J. Krause
He staggered forward, eyes fixed on his destination. Dirt caked deep in his face, running as mud where his tears tracked down. Bright crimson streaks painted his shoulders and back, covering the leathery scabs where they'd once been.
His wings.
His throat felt raw, like ground meat. He didn't test it, but he had no doubt his voice, if it worked at all, was hoarse to the point of incomprehension. Not that it mattered. There was no one left to talk to until he reached the gates.
The wounds--his stumps--itched and stung all at once. Hopefully it was the healing process and not maggots. He fell to his knees, vomited, and fought hard not to reach back to feel for movement. Why dwell on it when there was nothing he could do?
He clenched his teeth and stumbled forward. Almost there. He dreamed they'd shower him with spirit wine, purifying both his outer and inner wounds. Sure, and maybe they'd rediscovered the secret of Ambrosia from the long lost Greek and Roman Gods while they were at it. That'd get him back in the battle in no time.
He glanced back. Had he heard someone or something coming up behind him? No, it was impossible. No one but angels could pass through this plane, and he very well could be the last one outside the Lord's realm. With good reason, too, he thought as another shiver of pain rocked through his body.
How they found him made no sense. He'd lived among mortals since they first understood how to create and use tools. He'd kept his wings hidden, not only from the mortals, who despite their flaws, he loved as if they were his own offspring, but also from the demons who stalked and hunted the Earth and all surrounding dimensions. If they couldn't sense or see his wings, they couldn't single him out. His divinity saw to that.
Another sound drew his attention behind him, and this time there was no mistaking it. Something was following him. His muddled mind couldn't piece together how it was possible, but he braced himself. Not that he'd be able to fight anything off.
A half-dozen demons got the drop on him as he left his home. That they were of the lesser persuasion ultimately saved him. He dispatched three in short order, but that didn't dissuade the others. Before he could size them up and discover the best ways to both attack and defend, one had a blade against his left wing. He screamed as it fell, landing with a hollow thud on the ground.
The agony and loss propelled him on, and he made short work of two more demons. As he turned to face the last, the one who'd disfigured him, the blade slashed again, dropping his right wing. Blood dripped down his back and pooled at his feet.
That final demon laughed and raised the blade for the kill, but even in a haze of pain, he moved too quick. The demon's sword dropped and disintegrated as the monster joined its brethren in oblivion. He thought he might follow his six enemies, but though his blood flowed free and the pain blazed through him, he managed to shift planes to the only one where he had a chance. The Angel Express. The Highway to Heaven.
He couldn't venture a guess at how long he walked, crawled, and scratched his way forward towards the pearly gates. Now that he was in metaphorical spitting distance, something moved in to finish him. Though he hoped he struck a regal pose, he had no strength left to defend himself.
He fell to his knees and wept when he saw. Wings. An angel. But how? Even if he wasn't the last on Earth, what were the odds another would follow?
Then he saw. It wasn't another coming up the Angel Express, but his wings. And propelling them forward? No. Impossible. But there they were, no doubt sent by the Lord Himself. Three holy cherubs.
No words were spoken. Could they even communicate out of His presence? The wings touched his back, and though the pain disappeared, the itching intensified. One of the tiny cherubs placed its hand on his head, and light engulfed them all. When it lifted its touch, he felt as healthy and strong as ever. If not more so. He stretched his wings and found them alive and well. Even the bloodstains streaked across his skin had vanished.
The three cherubs smiled at him, their miniscule wings working overtime to keep them afloat. He expected them to zip off, their job done. He'd already received a gift he'd never expected, but what came next brought more tears, this time of intense joy. The cherubs outstretched their tiny hands, awaiting his to join them--a once in an eternity ticket to the Realm of the Throne. He wiped his tears away and put his hand in with those of the three cherubs.
What is wrong with me? I read a tale about an angel in dire straits and a tiny, gravelly voice whispers in my ear "yeah, stick it to 'im". Don't get me wrong, I'm one of the good guys and any other protagonist I'd be rooting for 100%, but when it comes to angels, not so. What I'm trying to say is: great flash ... but I feel robbed.
ReplyDeleteI loved this story, Eric. One of my favorites from you in quite some time. The raw descriptions brought life to his pain. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSuch harsh descriptions, and a sweet, joyful payoff. Very nice, Eric.
ReplyDeleteGood story Eric, unusual, and gritty. Funnily, I never really thought about angels being killing machines too.
ReplyDeleteAngels deserve happy endings. You don't know how hard it is keeping your feathers in the light all day. Was a wee bit disturbed to read that you can still feel like ground meat on the astral plane.
ReplyDeleteOh Eric, this is outstanding! The very best description of all your work, I believe. I love how he morphs from "down-and-nearly-completely-out" to "strong-and-ready", (hope that makes sense), so seamlessly.
ReplyDeleteLove, love, love it!
Very strong and vivid descriptions. I liked the mud created by the tears. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteI did start getting confused when he thought back about the demons, but other than that it was good.
A fascinating story, and intriguing, too.
ReplyDeleteA most excellent story, Eric, one that moved me to rooting for your angelic protagonist. The descriptions of the wounds and the battle were wonderful and gut wrenching at the same time. And like John wrote, Angels deserve happy endings... at least those who haven't fallen.
ReplyDeleteThat ending was very uplifting. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThis story really drew me in. Maybe because I love good angel stories (a la "City of Angels", etc.) The descriptions were terrific of his pain and agony over losing his wings. They left me hurting for him. The cherubs were a nice surprise. Great job!
ReplyDeleteA good visceral piece, evoking intensity and pain before redemption and salvation.
ReplyDeleteAdam B @revhappiness
I love angel stories... And this is no different. I've long thought a killer piece could be written about the lore of angels. They can be quite badass...
ReplyDeleteA great story.
ReplyDeleteI loved the idea of angels living secretly among us mere mortals.
Also enjoyed the notion of "demons of the lesser persuasion" - made me think about what the higher ranking demons might be like!
Hard to have a bigger clash that pure good versus pure evil. Graphic, grisly and heroic. Well done Eric!
ReplyDeleteI love it! As someone who has some experience writing about this topic, ( and once you read The Soulkeepers you will know exactly what I'm talking about) :) I would say you have put a unique spin on it. Great writing, Great descriptions!
ReplyDeleteI thought this merited a second reading and I got a lot more from it. I did find the shift from the attack to his journey a bit confusing at first, which is why I went back, but I really enjoyed it apart from that. I felt the angel's pain with the blade and love the way he tries to remain dignified in the face of death. Nice touch.
ReplyDeleteLots packed in here Eric. No less than I'd ever expect out of you. You always have the coolest ideas. Enjoyed this a TON. <3
ReplyDeleteOh this is just lovely. Don't tell anyone but I'm a massive fan of angels - and I think this has enough mythos that you could think of a longer work.
ReplyDeleteI like the struggle you've put the angel through and his unexpected redemption at the end. This could definately be a longer work or series.
ReplyDeletewhat a lovely story!
ReplyDeleteUnexpected help as the wounded angel makes what he thinks will be his last stand… great job!
ReplyDeleteAn intriguing look into the world of angels & demons. I loved the detail with highway to heaven/angel express.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone: great story, Eric!
ReplyDeleteI have a thing for angels too, although I'm not too keen in writing them. Hm, except for a zombie angel I wrote once. Weird, I know. :P
Thanks for all the great comments! I wasn't sure how this one was going to go over, so I'm glad the responses are mostly positive. I had fun writing this one, and though I'm not an overly religious person, I felt I needed to have the happy ending for the angel. As for those who would like to see this one expanded, it's possible. I've been turning ideas over in my mind even before I wrote this one, so maybe some day.
ReplyDeleteSuch a difficult path for the main character. I agonized for him, fearful what he'd encounter would be even worse. You surprised me. I was delighted by the ending. Wonderful use of sensory elements in the narrative.
ReplyDeleteTake care,
Jess